2009年5月25日月曜日

My treasure♪(Revised essay 2)

 I struck upon my pictures. They are my treasures which also contain my precious memories. I like to speak with someone and play outside with friends and my family. So my treasure is my pictures.
  I have many photos which are very important for me. My friends and I took pictures by camera during my junior and high school days. My best memory was having a good time with my friends. I sometimes look at pictures and I long for them. I think about what they are doing now and I sometimes send them an e-mail or letter. A while ago one of my friends sent me a letter from Hiroshima. I was very glad to see her letter. So I can feel that friendship lasts forever when I look at pictures.
  I have made friends with people from abroad since I entered KGU. I usually use my mobile phone to take pictures with them. Chan and Sai were my first friends from overseas. Last February, they went back to their countries. I often remember them when I look at their countries. And I can't meet them easily now,so pictures are precious things for me to remember them. But recently we could use chat by Skype and I am communicating with them.  
 Pictures remind me I have many friends and families everywhere. I am connecting with them even now if I can't meet them frequently. Memories of pictures will not die. I believe they will remain in my heart eternally.(782 words)week6 (6373 words)all

3 件のコメント:

Rick さんのコメント...

spend is a 他動詞

Other things to look at again:

friendship last
use mobile phone
they came back
fanilies
every where
inside pictures

Noriko さんのコメント...

I'm sorry it was late to send you this e-mail.
.spend:My best memory was had a good time with my friends.
.use mobile phone:I usually take pictures with them by my mobile phone.
.families: family
.inside pictures:in the pictures.

.every where→It is unnecessary word,so I don't write this word.
.friendship last: I couldn't find its correct word.

Noriko さんのコメント...

I had another correction.
.they came back:they returned